A6–Delicious
Meghan
10/20/09
L.A.
I love cookies! My favorite kind is chocolate chip. (When they’re not put in the oven by me. See A—4) When my mom made them I asked her to take them out a little early. As I waited for them to cool I already could taste their light, fluffy, flavor. My mouth was watering like crazy. Mom poured me a glass of milk. The warm moist delicate taste filled my mouth. The melty and delightful chocolate chips touched my tongue. It was heaven in my mouth! The rich and delicious flavor fills my mouth every time I think about them. (I made some cookies when I was finished writing this). I love chocolate chip cookies, and hope you do too!!
on November 1, 2009 at 9:41 pm
My favorite kind of cookie is chocolate chip too – though because I’m Australian, I still call them biscuits even after 4 years in the US! I love your description of the taste when you ate them, especially the phrase “heaven in my mouth.” Great writing, keep it up! Ms. G
on November 4, 2009 at 12:53 pm
After reading this, I’m really hungry for some cookies. No doubt that this hunger was created by your fabulous use of adjectives….I could taste the cookies. Could you and your Mom please make me some of her tofu Chocolate Chip cookies. (Please let her help you so that you don’t burn the house down as you almost did in your other post.)
Your writing is so descriptive! I can’t wait to read your first novel!
XOXOXO
ALA
on November 5, 2009 at 1:09 am
Meghan,
You have made me so hungry for a chocolate chip cookie! You know that I am always on a diet and that I get weighed every Thursday eve.
Now the big question is-should I go and have just one chocolate chip cookie? I would doubt my willpower!
Love your writing!
JOJO